Hyponatremia and lasix

Can't believe I did not read and review this. Strawberry definitely qualifies as ditzy, but many times it works for her--and especially regarding the reputation Shanghai girls have.
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While her syntax matches typical Chinese phrasings in English from my experience--and although I understand the addiction to using the word so--that word and several phrases repeat often where many could have stayed but there should have been reduced. Sometimes those about Alan or especially the girl we later discover as his sister Gwen, did interrupt the flow enough to make me stop and refocus. While it hardly sinks the story and no reader would say Strawberry was unjustified in traversing this love-hate view of Alan, I kind of imagine strategic editing would probably have cut half a page.
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It proves funny when the story reveals Gwen and now Strawberry reinterprets. One can understand Pete's behavior, but it's clear he's still taking advantage instead of being the gentleman. While she diffuses the possible conflict, there's no way the other roommates didn't get some idea from their screaming. It remains to be seen if a conflict occurs because really it should or she gets off a little easy and Pete escapes unscathed.
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It surprised me you were somehow unaware of one of the best foods that remedy hangover--especially since Strawberry ate it in ch 1--CONGEE. It's best for absorbing some of the alcohol and rehydrating. Also, ginger (and it's assumed ginger tea) do an excellent job. Chinese homeopaths typically use ginger tea to help prevent colds, although it helps fight nausea, dizziness, and diarrhea. The cups of jasmine tea and Tylenol presented as too hyperbolic, because more than 3,250 mg of that can damage the liver, possibly causing jaundice; had she drank 200 cups of tea, it would have caused her hyponatremia. You researched so many other things that I have to kind of rib you about this by channeling my inner Number Five from the movie Short Circuit, saying this: Chloe Tzang, Ph.d not know this???
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I absolutely loved the end notes you used and of course all of the linguistic elements you fuse to the story. To even culminate the narrative with a communal meal is a very nice touch. You certainly pictured her well according to how Shanghai girls are, as verified by my own research--and the reason why the guys tend to do more in the house is because many Shanghai girls that were the only children by policy never developed many housekeeping skills because their parents allowed them to study to do their best in school, and so the parents did all the housework. This also partially explains Strawberry.
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I enjoyed this edition, especially by liking it. Despite the need to rid the tale of sometimes-excessive repetitions above, it didn't hinder communicating the story, nor did it detract from how entertaining it was. 4

God damn give it a rest. Repeating the same fucking things over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over again!!! STOP!!!!!

And more and more and more and more and more

Way to much fucking and to little of the story.
Not everyone wants to read about fucking and fucking and fucking and fucking and fucking and fucking and fucking and fucking and fucking and fucking.

And on and on and on and on.

And on and on and on and on,,,,……..snore….

It's more than just the sex, so make real characters... the same as porno characters but with different size dicks and boobs? How about real real characters who like ikebana and Gaelic football and architecture and meringues and grey mohair, who have lives and jobs and magazines and bicycles and pet fish and glasses and essays to write and marbles in a dish and a well-thumbed volume of Byron and a wuukiee on their key fob, who sing in the choir and cruise cowboy movie websites and do the crossword and...?